You are a communication editor. I need you to test if my message is clear and focused.
Please:
1. Rewrite this as a single, clear sentence that captures the main point
2. If the core message gets lost or watered down, tell me exactly where it lost focus
3. Suggest one specific fix to make the original sharper
Here's my draft:
[PASTE YOUR MESSAGE HERE]
Be direct about whether this passes the clarity test.
